2023年10月浙江强基高三英语读后续写生日惊喜讲义高考英语作文复习专

读后续写原文

Sally’s birthday was approaching, and the excitement that usually filled her

heart was now replaced with disappointment and stress. Turning eleven was a

big deal, and she had always celebrated it with a grand party surrounded by her

friends. However, this year was different. The burden of excessive

homework and her parents’ struggling business weighed heavily on her, forcing

Sally to make the difficult decision of not having a birthday party, even though

it was an event she enjoyed dearly every year.

One day, during break, her best friend, Jane, with a curious look in her eyes,

approached. “Are you going to have a birthday party this year?” Jane asked, sensing

Sally’s sadness.

“No,” Sally sighed and replied sadly, “There’s just too much going on and my

parents are going through financial difficulties.”

She smiled weakly, trying to conceal her immense disappointment and

stress, but Jane saw through her pretence (假装) easily. Jane nodded thoughtfully and

did not say anything. After the break, Sally saw her talking to one of their

classmates, Sarah, secretively. Curious, Sally went over to them, but as soon as Jane

saw her, she quickly walked away. Sally was startled by Jane’s strange actions and

turned towards Sarah.

“What did she say?” Sally asked.

However, Sarah simply shrugged and walked away with Jane, leaving Sally

standing there, feeling left out and anxious.

What is happening? Sally wondered anxiously. Are they keeping something from

me?

As Sally’s birthday drew nearer, Jane was often found chatting softly with her

other classmates. Whenever Sally went over to them, they would just walk away or

tell her that they were talking about a secret which Sally was not allowed to know.

Jane has never kept secrets from me before, Sally thought. Her heart fell. Even her

friends were distancing themselves from her! She swung between confusion and

sadness with each passing moment, desperately trying to figure out what was

happening. Why were her friends distancing themselves from her? And what were

they hiding?

续写段首句：

P1:On the day of Sally’s birthday, she went to school and found her classroom

in total darkness.

P2: Tears sprang from Sally’s eyes and her face broke into a radiant smile.

解题思路

step1:

根据读原文时所划关键信息确定故事问题/矛盾（通常有两层：① 事情本身；② 通

过事情所表达的情感/思想）读原文时需划的关键信息主要包括：①负面否定信

息 ②与前者形成对比的信息 ③反复出现信息 ④问题信息 ⑤转折信息

本文主要问题/矛盾：1 浅层：生日派对是否举办；朋友为何有那些行为举动

是否疏远我2 深层：关于友情的感悟

step2:

根据题目已给的段首句与主要矛盾确定每段发展到什么程度P1: Sally 惊喜地看

到朋友们为其精心准备的生日派对P2: 事情层面的矛盾在第一段都已解决，为了

突出中心主旨，可以在第二段聚焦描写Sally与文中具体描写过的Jane或Sarah

之间的互动，最后引出对友情的感悟

step3：

每段具体设计：确定描写对象，从行为动作/语言、心理感受/神态表情两大方面

交替描写各个对象，必要处添加环境等其他描写

设计示例：

P1： 描写对象——Sally、 朋友同学们Sally： 好奇 困惑，走进教室 试图开灯

同学们：亮起灯 欢呼 从角落窜出 表达祝福 拍手 唱歌 拿着蛋糕走进Sally

环境：教室精心布置 生日蛋糕放在桌上

Sally：明白了一切

P2: 描写对象——Sally、JaneSally：激动惊讶 语塞Jane：走进 拥抱 说话（具

体语言内容 结合文章线索设置，最好能突出文章中心主旨）

Sally：感动；通过语言+动作（鞠躬等）表达感谢感悟: 对友情的感悟

谨记：1. 必写高级句式： 非谓 、独立主格、 定从、 名从、 倒装、 强调2. 多

从原文找线索，利用相关词汇，提高与原文的契合度

英文写作示例

P1:On the day of Sally’s birthday, she went to school and found her classroom

in total ed by infinite curiosity and confusion（利用非谓结构

将情绪描写与行为动作描写结合到一句话）, she gently opened the door

and attempted to reach the light switch. However, before she touched the

switch, the darkness and silence were broken by rays of flashlight and cheers

from her classmates who were just hiding in the corners of classroom.“Happy

birthday to you! Sally.” “Wish you a memorable birthday!” They were

clapping, singing and approaching to her with candles and presents in

hands. What further amazed her （疑问词引导的名从）was that the classroom

was elaborately decorated and a big cake of multiple layers was on her table.

At this moment, all confusion and sadness were erased .

P2: Tears sprang from Sally’s eyes and her face broke into a radiant

shocked was Sally that（倒装）she even couldn’t speak anything for a short

moment. Then, Jane stepped forward and hugged her tightly, whispering in

Sally’s ear,“I know you are going through a lot recently, but you have us, your

friends, on your birthday and everyday.”（突出友情 凸显中心主旨的语言内

容） “Thank you, Jane. Thank you, dear friends. This is undoubtedly the most

precious birthday party I’ve ever had.” Sally bowed and expressed her sincere

appreciation to everyone, extreme warmth overflowing in her heart（独立主格

结构）. It was on this birthday that （强调句）she became convinced her friends

had never distanced themselves from her and they were even the most forting

sunshine on those chilling tough days.

下水文：

P1:On the day of Sally’s birthday, she went to school and found her classroom

in total she hesitated to enter the room due to fear, a wave of fear

and nervousness swept over her, and her heart pounded. She groped to turn on the

light switch, but before her hand could find it, a chorus of cheers broke the silence. It's

amazing, it's unbelievable! "The students, led by Jane, jumped out of various hiding

places. The room was well lit, and Sally's eyes widened in surprise, incredulous. The

classroom is decorated with balloons and ribbons, there is a very exquisite cake on the

table, and there is a pile of gifts waiting to be opened in the corner.

P2: Tears sprang from Sally’s eyes and her face broke into a radiant

turned to Jane, who couldn't close her mouth at the moment. We know you can't hold

a party this year, so we've decided to give you the party as a big surprise. Don't blame

me for deliberately hiding you, "Jane said, her eyes full of pranks. This is indeed a

grand birthday party, just like the ones she held before, which will be unforgettable

for her whole life.